a simple poem, to a simple fool

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You once said you loved me so much
Always a charmer with flowers and such,
your smile alone could make me weak,
Oh, but that’s nothing compared to when I heard you speak!

your skin to my touch, was so sweet to feel
your lips on my face, felt so surreal
I did not expect my heart to go a flutter
Then in a blink of an eye, it all went straight to the gutter!

I’ll never again know a love like yours
that’s good for me , but bad for your whores!
Because you see, unlike them
now I can finally breathe!

So feel free to raom and free to fly
But mark my words, one day you’ll cry
I loved you hard and I loved you deep
And in return, you made me weep.

To this I say...you simple fool
It could have been beautiful it could have been cool...


This is my try at poem writing!!.lol
 
Muchas gracias😉

Your Valentines Day tribute was was off the hinges!!.lolol
 
Nayaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa...Now that was hot...Just extend it a bit more, add a chorus..Then BAM! You got another hot single coming on the way girl,..😉
 
NAYA..THAT WAS BEAUTIFUL..YOU SPEAK FOR MOST WOMEN WITH THOSE WORDS..TRUST ME I'M A ROOKIE TOO..BUT SOMEHOW PUTTING YOUR FEELINGS DOWN ON PAPER CAN BECOME QUITE FULFILLING NO MATTER WHAT FORM IT'S WRITTEN IN.
 
nice one nena, c u looked inside and didnt hid ,
out ur words came just like a flame, i think u no what i mean ,if it comes from within u will always win, and u said u said u were trying to write a poem, the only thing is u did
 
Nyasia said:
your skin to my touch, was so sweet to feel
your lips on my face, felt so surreal
I did not expect my heart to go a flutter
Then in a blink of an eye, it all went straight to the gutter!
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Ahhhhh LMAO love those lines!! You wouldn't believe how those lines ring true for so many people!! That's why it's so good, it touches people's hearts and they know what you mean because they've been there themselves or know someone who has or they could imagine what it's like...

Nyasia said:
So feel free to raom and free to fly
But mark my words, one day you’ll cry
I loved you hard and I loved you deep
And in return, you made me weep.
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I would've switch those two lines around to:

"I loved you hard and I loved you deep
And in return, you made me weep
So feel free to raom and free to fly
But mark my words, one day you’ll cry"

Amazing poem.:hearton I love your style of writing Nyasia.
 
thanks Angeleyes!,

I agree with the switching of the lines too.hehehe
Crystal, the spanish verse I put up is my friend telling her mother in a nut shell that she's sorry if she ever caused her any pain and to please forgive her if she ever made her cry, because she has finally come to see that her mother is mother and friend to her. It sounds better when it's sung in spanish, but that's the gist of it mama.😉
 
Nya, Nya, you got connection to our hearts

As it's been said before me, you touched our hearts with this one. Girlfriend, THAT WAS AWESOME, TRULY AWESOME.

You should shock us more often with these poems of yours.

De verdead que te quedo muy lindo

Cuidate,
Lou-Lou
 
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