Emotional Today - Club Freestyle

La Mas Grande · 12-10-2005, 09:50 PM

On an emotional high with too many tears to wipe aside
My impatient heart cries as I put on a big, bright smile
The irrelevance of me is too painful to conceive yet day after day the truth is on display.

My creativity seems to have gone hence this poem gone wrong
The qualities that I've love most have diminished leaving me with loneliness and tear that won't go away.
Hang on, stay strong, it will get better that all persuade.
Well, walk in my shoes just for today.

I want to climb the Highest mountain and never come down, dig the deepest ditch and lay on the ground, I want to turn back the hands of time to before I was born and just stop it from that moment. I want to close my eyes and not see death yet there it is, beckoning me , whispering,seducing me.

What am I saying, just too many emotions today, tomorrow I will try to make it a better day.

Poetry In Motion · 12-11-2005, 05:40 PM

Very emotional, I would say. Very dramatically captivating.

Only you have the power to sustain any negative energy coming toward your life. Make sure you are the one in control.

La Mas Grande · 12-11-2005, 07:32 PM

Thanks for the feedback and the advice Poetry.

MyriamCruz1977 · 12-11-2005, 09:25 PM

mamasitas, thank you for sharing your heart and expressing your thoughts like only you know how. I could def. relate to these words and can advise you to hold on to whatever/whoever brings at least a little bit of peace, joy, laughter in your life so that you could get through. Amazing words...thanks for sharing.

La Mas Grande · 12-11-2005, 09:27 PM

Ahh thank you mama..........

Enigma · 12-14-2005, 03:55 PM

That is powerful writing...at it's finest.

La Mas Grande · 12-15-2005, 09:44 AM

Thank you sweety

mzcrazybtch · 12-15-2005, 07:52 PM

that was some deep writing ma....(((hugs)))

La Mas Grande · 12-17-2005, 12:13 AM

Thank you mzb..........

lonely4eva · 01-21-2010, 01:42 PM

that was deep im feelin it

12-10-2005, 09:50 PM	#1
La Mas Grande CF Senior Freestyler Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: representing Bushwick Posts: 8,999	Emotional Today On an emotional high with too many tears to wipe aside My impatient heart cries as I put on a big, bright smile The irrelevance of me is too painful to conceive yet day after day the truth is on display. My creativity seems to have gone hence this poem gone wrong The qualities that I've love most have diminished leaving me with loneliness and tear that won't go away. Hang on, stay strong, it will get better that all persuade. Well, walk in my shoes just for today. I want to climb the Highest mountain and never come down, dig the deepest ditch and lay on the ground, I want to turn back the hands of time to before I was born and just stop it from that moment. I want to close my eyes and not see death yet there it is, beckoning me , whispering,seducing me. What am I saying, just too many emotions today, tomorrow I will try to make it a better day. __________________ ... tinker bells rock... dayzd n confused suck ass

12-11-2005, 07:32 PM	#3
La Mas Grande CF Senior Freestyler Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: representing Bushwick Posts: 8,999	Thanks for the feedback and the advice Poetry. __________________ ... tinker bells rock... dayzd n confused suck ass

12-11-2005, 09:27 PM	#5
La Mas Grande CF Senior Freestyler Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: representing Bushwick Posts: 8,999	Ahh thank you mama.......... __________________ ... tinker bells rock... dayzd n confused suck ass

12-14-2005, 03:55 PM	#6
Enigma Honorary CF Member Join Date: Sep 2001 Posts: 22,865	That is powerful writing...at it's finest. __________________ e·nig·ma: One that is puzzling, ambiguous, or inexplicable.

12-15-2005, 09:44 AM	#7
La Mas Grande CF Senior Freestyler Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: representing Bushwick Posts: 8,999	Thank you sweety __________________ ... tinker bells rock... dayzd n confused suck ass

12-11-2005, 05:40 PM	#2
Poetry In Motion Banned Join Date: Oct 2005 Age: 31 Posts: 324	Very emotional, I would say. Very dramatically captivating. Only you have the power to sustain any negative energy coming toward your life. Make sure you are the one in control.

12-11-2005, 09:25 PM	#4
MyriamCruz1977 CF Freestyler Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: New York City Posts: 581	mamasitas, thank you for sharing your heart and expressing your thoughts like only you know how. I could def. relate to these words and can advise you to hold on to whatever/whoever brings at least a little bit of peace, joy, laughter in your life so that you could get through. Amazing words...thanks for sharing.

12-15-2005, 07:52 PM	#8
mzcrazybtch CF Senior Freestyler Join Date: Dec 2001 Location: JERSEY-RICAN Posts: 6,069	that was some deep writing ma....(((hugs)))

12-17-2005, 12:13 AM	#9
La Mas Grande CF Senior Freestyler Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: representing Bushwick Posts: 8,999	Thank you mzb.......... __________________ ... tinker bells rock... dayzd n confused suck ass

01-21-2010, 01:42 PM	#10
lonely4eva CF Freestyler Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: I live in bridgeport and grew up in da hood, but managed 2 stay on the right path.I'm really into freestyle and poetry Posts: 742	that was deep im feelin it __________________ LOVE CAN CAUSE PAIN, BUT FROM PAIN WE CAN GROW....